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Mercy-Luxed's avatar

Wonderful style and structure

Nuno Pinto's avatar

Very slick, congratulations!

Ian Patterson's avatar

This. Is. Excellent. Dialog sharp enough to cut, introspection gorgeously written. Nice work, well deserved.

Trevor Cohen's avatar

Wow! I felt broken down to all my constituent tubes extruding my way thru life. Congratulations on a championship performance!

Nick Buchheit's avatar

Ah. Yes. I see why you are the winner. I read this and saw a movie. The dialog was pitch perfect and this oozed with tone and tension. Brilliant work. Congrats!

Rosie B's avatar

Excellent! Lines are sharp!

Evan Miller's avatar

Knee it was good from that very first description of the light reassembling. Great stuff.

Stephen Prime's avatar

Thank you! Yeah I went into my own head for that one; halogen gives me migraines

Stephanie Sweeney's avatar

Confident, cool, kept the reader off-kilter. Loved it. Congratulations!

Stephen Prime's avatar

thank you!! Glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write. I have various “tube” stories already finished, starting with Adam-tube and Eve-tube and moving all the way to a media-studies lecture on the history of information, according to tubes. I’ll be sharing more soon!

Saint-Lazare's avatar

The image of the tubes gripped me from the start, then I relished in all the other ones. Incredible atmosphere

Helen Grover's avatar

Earl was so well done. All of them were great portraits but there was a lot of character in Earl’s Waffle House line and I think he’ll stick with me the most